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Oud 30 december 2009, 21:05
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Juniorlid
 
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Standaard Re: Motivatiebrief traineeship

Hoi Lidwien,

I am an english native speaker and think you need to rewrite this letter. I do not want to sound disrespectful but your cover letter comes across superficial and arrogant. First things first

A) What is the name of the recruiter ?? Please add

B) Shorten all your sentences & please confirm if you degree is truly xxxx and xxx and xxx

C) Marketing management- what is this exactly & what have you done specifically ( study /work ) which gives one the impression that you are suitable ??

D) Global mindsets : Try and focus on how your international study & travel allowed you to broaden your skills / knowledge in a cultural diverse manner so that it applicable to the job application

best regards

Donna
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