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Oud 3 maart 2008, 21:58
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aplication car technician for european help desk



Dear Ms Heike Hann

My interest goes to the opening for technical consultant that one of you’re employees, Mr Hendricus Janssen offert me. Willingly I present myself for this opening.


I gained a diploma car techniques which I upgraded with a specialisation diesel and LPG techniques.
Dutch, English, French, Arab are no difficulty. I have the shaping and the experience which you ask in your profile. In my current job I am a car mechanic at a distributor of Opel, Chevrolet and Isuzu. I have been improving the last 4 years with courses from GM academy and received gold label this is a statute that GM academy gives for my knowledge. Weekly I read GM updates and also do GM none obligatory courses.

To maintain successful results your company exist of a team that is up-to-date,
educated and pasionated. I am convinced that I fit in such team. I have team spirit, wide experience, service specific attitude, flexible, professional and immune to stress.

As technical consultant I could be a valuable contribution to your company.

Interested in this captivating oppertunety I hope we meet personally so I can convince you from my capacities


wijs me op zinsbouw inhoud fouten alvast bedankt iedereen
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Oud 4 maart 2008, 23:28
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Standaard Re: Sollicitatie in het engels; gelieve nalezen

Een kleine typfout; 'oppertunety'= OPPORTUNITY.
Let verder op de opbouw, want deze ziet er wat slordig uit. Succes er mee!
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Oud 5 maart 2008, 07:04
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Standaard Re: Sollicitatie in het engels; gelieve nalezen

Hi Donkere Sint,

I have a few recommendations regarding your letter.

Citaat:
Dear Ms Heike Hann
Do you know if she's married? If not, you should use "Mss".

Citaat:
My interest goes to the opening for technical consultant that one of you’re employees, Mr Hendricus Janssen offert me. Willingly I present myself for this opening.
you're must be your
offert muste be offered

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I gained a diploma car techniques which I upgraded with a specialisation diesel and LPG techniques.
You specialize in diesel (...)

Dutch, English, French, Arab are no difficulty.
Don't forget the "and" between French and Arab. Also this sentence doesn't really shine off its greatness in English. To be honest this sentence looks like its translated directly from a Dutch one "Deze talen zijn geen moeilijkheid". Try a different sentence here.

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I have been improving the last 4 years with courses from GM academy and received gold label this is a statute that GM academy gives for my knowledge.
Have you been improving cars? Or your carreer? Or maybe yourself? You should specify this. Shouldn't it be "the GM academy" and "a gold label"? Don't forget the comma between "label" and "this". Also, "statute" means "richtlijn/aanwijzing". I don't think this word really applies in this sentence.

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Weekly I read GM updates and also do GM none obligatory courses.
This sentence should be "I read GM Updates weekly and also do GM nonobligatory courses".

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To maintain successful results your company exist of a team that is up-to-date, educated and pasionated.
"Pasionated" should be passionated

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I am convinced that I fit in such team.
It's such a team.

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I have team spirit, wide experience, service specific attitude, flexible, professional and immune to stress.
team spirit must be teamspirit
'flexible', 'professional' and 'immune to stress' are not things you have, but things you can do. This sentence should be "I have teamspirit, wide experience, service specific attitude and I am flexible, professional and immune to stress".

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As technical consultant I could be a valuable contribution to your company.
I'd choose for "would" instead of "could", this shows off your self-confidence

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Interested in this captivating oppertunety I hope we meet personally so I can convince you from my capacities
As said by Not-Registered, "oppertunety" must be opportunity.
Also, you don't "convince from something". It's better to use "about"

I hope this helps!
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Oud 9 maart 2008, 11:33
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Hi Donkere Sint,

it's saint like in angel...

team spirit must be teamspirit

mijn F7 toets laat me weten dat team spirit niet aan elkaar is,effen opzoeken...

THANKS 2 H@ns and Niet geregistreerd
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Oud 13 maart 2008, 14:35
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Oorspronkelijk geplaatst door H@ns Bekijk bericht

Do you know if she's married? If not, you should use "Mss".
Dear Hans,

Isn't it the case that when you're not sure whether or not a person is married you can use Ms? I was taught that it could then be both a Mrs (married) or a Miss (unmarried).

Kind regards,

Nike
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Oud 5 maart 2010, 19:38
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Wat betekent het woord 'taught'?
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Oud 5 maart 2010, 21:29
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Standaard Re: Sollicitatie in het engels; gelieve nalezen

taught: werkwoordsvorm; betekening leren (verleden tijd, to teach, taught, taught)

In English: Taught: v. Past tense and past participle of teach.

I just wonder where the word 'taught' has been used and if it is the correct word...

Another question I am curious about....Why are we answering in english while this whole forum is in Dutch?

T.
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